sunset from behind the wire

sunset from behind the wire

Friday, November 20, 2015

Writing Challenge

LL, total bum
This is a writing challenge from a fellow blogger who you all know (from reading responses on this blog).

Keep in mind that I'm a beach bum these days and as such, my priorities are  a very small bit of creativity, balanced by beach combing and the odd Harley Davidson ride through the rain forrest and along the sandy shingle as azure water laps land where tide is measured by a foot plus or minus.

However, there is a thread of the old LL, who is competitive and can't resist a challenge that is proffered.  I am a knight that once slapped in the face by a mailed gauntlet, can not but meet my fate on a field of honor. Thus the old me is going to respond not because I want to so much as my character drives me to.  That notwithstanding, the pen is not mightier than the sword, unless you drive it through your enemy's eye and into his brain. Than it's just as lethal as a sword...on to the challenge.

One way to cultivate your emotional and poetic mind, and to improve your writing skills in general, is to write stream-of-consciousness. This is unstructured, unedited writing that reflects your observations or feelings about a certain person, event, or item. Stream-of-consciousness is a good way to write poetry or journals, and can end with a piece of writing that can be as much graphic as verbal.

This is my response to the challenge I can only hope that it isn't a ruse for a cyber Rorschach test.





The world is cerulean blue and white. A witch on her broom flies backward as a sparrow consumes a snake. The basket of fruit slowly dissolves and becomes something else but I can't tell what it might be. Maybe it won't be anything? An F-22 going west from Hickam pierces the mouth of an ogre. The white becomes red and orange, the red becomes vermilion and fades to ochre. Yellow to brown, to gray and then mere shades in the darkness who do their best to obscure the moon that wants to lay a shimmering path to heaven across a black ocean. Evening in paradise.


25 comments:

  1. "I can only hope that it isn't a ruse for a cyber Rorschach test." Ha! Everything is a test, Larry.
    Well, I think Paradise suits you and brings about your poetic nature. I think you should do more of these. Whoever sent it must be very insightful. Obviously, being the person that I am will be reading into all your metaphors and rich adjectives which will most probably result in you ending up in my "psychopath" book.

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    1. At least I will be among friends in that chapter in your book...tomahawk killers and such.

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    2. English Ebonics translation:The witches broom backwards - modern day aerodynamics - bitch sorcery of the modern day. The sparrow consumes the snake - It’s usually the other way round (this could could refer to a blow job or it could just be relevant to a role reversal scenario) The basket of fruit could be the object of desire turning into something else…but what? And will it? Or it could be the fear of its decay or reference to a nut job?
      An F-22 Stealth fighter into the mouth of an ogre = blow job or clever play.
      The innocence becomes passion and dissipates to softer. Orgasm. The colours of coming down to earth thereafter and into a darkness from a fantasy or possibility. Darkness of the mind always finds a way to obscure if you let it. You have to step out of those shadows to see the way to pleasure and the way will be lit.
      OR, it could just be a beautiful evening in Paradise watching the sunset with a seven up on ice. What do I know?

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  2. This is just jibberish to me, LL. Maybe you could translate it into Ebonics for me.

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    1. Free form of consciousness...Clouds at sunset with an F-22...and a moon.

      Ebonics translation: Yo da beotch on da beach has uh fine ass. ah wants ta tap dat ass what 'chew trippin, foo. Yo muh motha fuckin rap makes her wants ta suck me off Ya' dig?

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    2. DISCLAIMER:

      True ebonics always includes vital elements such as rape, rap, drugs and stolen goods. The rap above shorted you on drugs and stolen goods. Michael Brown would have been a better source of true ebonic expression, except that he's not around anymore. But he momma be and she be lookin fo a sugga daddy to by her crack. (but I think that Sharpton beat everyone else to it because she wanted a reverend, a man of god, to be there for her)

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    3. Ah, now I understand. Why didn't you say that in the first place?

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  3. I like the ebonics version best, but that's just me. You might enjoy this:

    https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=yDIlQ3_lsKE

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    1. He definitely goes hard like Vladimir Puttin.

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    2. Rather popular song in Russia, I believe.

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    3. The Russians that I know in Russia (and yes, I do know a few) have very little regard for people of color, for homosexuals or transexuals (who they consider to be abominations), Muslims or categories revered by the American progressive left.

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  4. I actually like it. What does that say about me?

    I have gone back to writing morning pages (The Artists Way) and some mornings it can be fairly stream-of-consciousness.

    It really does ground your day.

    The Artist's Way

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    1. Free form of consciousness has its own appeal. It may not be for everyone. I personally prefer working on the short stories that appear on this blog from time to time. The next short will be a three-part story called "The Thirteenth Colony", and begins with a ship wreck off the Atlantic coast of Africa in the winter of 117 AD.

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  5. Okay - sorry the link didn't work. Just search "The Artist's Way by Julia Cameron at Amazon.

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    1. Look, I'm all for Caroline Mack Truck's advice when it comes to breast exfoliation.
      Blot yourself, by all means!!! I don't know what that means, but it sounds delicate and appropriate.

      Meanwhile, back on this planet called Earth, do your best to free style the sunset!! That was pretty awesome, I felt. I'd sort of like a play-by-play of sunsets, everywhere, every day. That would do justice to God in a small sort of way, I think.

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    2. One comfort I take when I look up is that I never see an imperfect sky. It changes endlessly, but it is always perfect in its way. Sunrises and sunsets are naturally the most spectacular, but they don't alter the perfection that is the sky overhead.

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  7. This was like one of the games we play. We'd all close our eyes and then imagine. one picks on the stream of thought of the other, and this goes on till we're all in the same dreamland. In those worlds we've been to war lands and thought of peace and sometimes we've gotten lost in those.
    Sometimes I feel some of us started staying there.

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    1. It's safer to stay there in the ether than it is to face the realities and complexities of life, where things are less clearly defined and where hearts can be more easily broken. Unfortunately, life - is - life.

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